the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of education setting in the uK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of education setting in the uK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting  the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided graph illustrates the proportion of male and female
teachers
in six education types in the British in 2010. The six education types are nursery or pre-
school
, primary
school
, secondary
school
, college, private training institute, and university. It can be clearly seen that
the
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each type had
their
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own majority, even significantly different.
On the other hand
, only
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the college had
same
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amount of men and women
teachers
.  The majority of female
teachers
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dominantly
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in
pre-
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preschool
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school
and primary
school
, with approximately 95% and upper than 90%, respectively.
On secondary
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school
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schools
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also
had female
teachers
as their majority (less than 60%), which was not as significant as pre-
school
and primary
school
.  Meanwhile, in higher
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of education
such
as private training
institute
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and
university
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universities
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in the United Kingdom,
the
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female teacher was the minority. The percentage of male
teacher
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in university was 70%
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to the female with only 30% of the teacher.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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