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The table shows the population ratio of females per 100 males in six different areas in 1995 and 2005. (Africa, Asia, Europe, North America, Central America and Oceania).

The table shows the population ratio of females per 100 males in six different areas in 1995 and 2005. (Africa, Asia, Europe, North America, Central America and Oceania).
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The table highlights the population proportion of women each hundred males in
Africa
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, Asia,
Europe
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, North
America
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, Central USA and Oceania.
Overall
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, Asia had a higher ratio than the other 5 countries in both years.
While
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, Oceania added to his ratio slightly more than 4, which is the best developed in
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 table. In detail,
Africa
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, Asia and
Europe
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 increased their ratio. The other 3 countries decreased analogically.
Africa
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 was a pre-lastlast country with just above 100%.
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,
Europe
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 had the lowest percentage, more precisely 8,4% less than
Africa
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. Central USA had exactly 100% which is less than North
America
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 for 0,1%.
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,
Europe
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 and North
America
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 rose and fell at 3,4 and 3,2 respectively and had 92,8 and 96,9 analogically. The situation as North
America
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 had Oceania and Central
America
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 which decreased
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 as 4,1 and 2,5 respectively.
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,
Africa
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 added to his performance which was in 1995 approximately 2 amount
of
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woman
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Vocabulary: Replace the words africa, europe, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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