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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the process of electricity generation in a hydroelectric
power
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 station.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are three steps during the electricity generation, which is starting at a river flowing into a high-level
reservoir
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.
Consequently
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, the process ends with the outcome of
river
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the river
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 getting
low-level
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a low-level
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reservoir
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.
Firstly
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, the river flows into a high-level
reservoir
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 with the support of a dam. Turning to the next step, the
water
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 was
intaked
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taken
 by the long pumping which was opened
on
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during
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day
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the day
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 and closed at
night
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.
Then
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 the flow of
water
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 can get to the
power
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 station and generate electricity through
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generator
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a generator
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 on
day
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the day
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.
In addition
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, the
generator
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 will
also
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 work at
night
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 in order to deliver
water
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 during pumping at
night
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. In terms of
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generator
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the generator
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 from
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power
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the power
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 station, it connects the national grid via
power
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 lines.
And the
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The
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 bottom of it is called
reversible
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a reversible
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turbines
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turbine
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, which can operate
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generator
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a generator
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in
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during
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day
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the day
a day
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 and pump
water
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 into
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
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 at
night
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.
Consequently
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, the
water
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 can reach the
low level
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low-level
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reservoir
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at the end
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "consequently".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, reservoir, water, night, generator with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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