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Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time manage ment. Do you agree or disagree.

#students #period #study #fun #time #ment
life is beautiful when we
born
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are born
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 we don't have any knowledge but over
time
 we learn new
thing
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things
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abot
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about
ourslef
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ourself
yourself
.
therefore
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Therefore
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,we should
to
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apply
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learn and take
advange
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advantage
our
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of our
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time
. most people see
period
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a period
the period
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 of
young
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being young
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 is very important to learn new
thing
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things
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,and develop
ourself
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ourselves
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,because
this
 period of our life is very
signifiant
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significant
 because we have a lot of
time
 and free
time
. on
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the onther
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onther
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other
another
 hand,some people see
this
time
 is very important to play and fine,until they grow up. in my opinion,
i
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I
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 see both sides have
a good opinions
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a good opinion
good opinions
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,but
i
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I
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 see when you study when you are young better than when you are
grown
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a grown
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 man .
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introduction conclusion
Your introduction needs to clearly state your position on the topic and outline the main points that you will discuss in the essay.
introduction conclusion
Your essay lacks a proper conclusion which summarizes the main points and reiterates your position.
supported main points
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Work on improving the logical flow of your ideas so that the essay reads more coherently.
clear comprehensive ideas
Avoid repeating the same ideas; instead, expand on each idea to provide a thorough discussion.
complete response
Make sure to address all aspects of the task prompt comprehensively. Explain why students should or should not manage their own time, with relevant examples.
task achievement
You provide a balanced view, considering both perspectives on the topic, which is good for a well-rounded argument.
supported main points
Your essay shows an understanding that different people have different preferences and opinions.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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