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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The diagram compares three sources of
air
pollutants
 and their contribution to
pollution
 in
UK
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the UK
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 in 15 years, starting from 1990. There has been a general decline in total
air
pollutants
 over the years, owing primarily to the sharp decrease in the amount of
pollution
 caused by Industry, which saw the greatest fall in
pollution
 from 1993-1996. It continued decreasing
after
this
 as well, but at
slower
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a slower
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 rate.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, it produced about 3.5 million tonnes less
pollution
 in 2005 than in 1990. Looking closely at the other two factors, Transport and
Houshold
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Household
 produced
pollution
 remained steady, as both of them did not surpass over 1 million tonnes of
air
pollution
 in the 15 years, with the exception of 1995
where
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 transport was just slightly above. The graph positively indicates the fall in total
air
pollutants
, owing to the advancements in technology which helped control these
pollutants
.
Moreover
, it
also
 points out that transport is the only source of
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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 that caused
had
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more
pollution
 in 2005 than in 1990, and henceforth there is a need to control it since it has been on an increasing trend since 1999.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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