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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1986 and 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1986 and 2018
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The bar chart
illustrate
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 the percentage of weekly income spending by families in a country from 1968 to 2019.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 food was the largest
category
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 in 1968 how are most
notable
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 the expenses on housing and
laser
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lasers
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 had a
rapidly increased
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by
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in
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 2018 compared to 1968. In the year
of
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968 families and most weekly income on food at 35% making it almost 70% in 2018.
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,
there
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 was followed by spending on housing, clothing and footwear with around 10%. Household
good
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goods
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, personal goods, transport and leisure were the next highest
category
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 with nearly 9%. The list amount spent on
the
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fuel and power
about
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 6%. In the year
of
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2018, the
popular
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 section was
on
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the
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leisure , which accounted for just over 20% spent. Housing was the next popular expenditure ,with around 18% spent. Spending on transport was the
nearest
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highest
category
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, with just under 15
percent
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per cent
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. The least expenditure was
in
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 personal goods and the fuel and power
category
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 standing at around 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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