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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the production levels of the
Uk’s
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UK’s
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 main fuels including coal, natural
gas
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 and
petroleum
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 from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, all the fuels mentioned had a fluctuation trend in the time frame.
While
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 the figure
of
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for
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 both natural
gas
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 and
petroleum
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 had an upward trend, coal’s
number
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 decreased significantly until the end. In 1981, around 90
million
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tonnes
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 of
petroleum
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 was produced and increased significantly to 140
million
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tonnes
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 in 5 years before plummeting by 40
million
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tonnes
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 in the year 1991.
Beside
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, the
quantity
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number
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 of coal
tonnes
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 which was produced in the first year was 80
million
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,
this
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number
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 fell to nearly 62
million
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 in 1986 and continued to decline slightly until 1991. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of natural
gas
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 has steadily increased from 42 to 43
million
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tonnes
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 over 5 years. From the year 1991 to the end, the
number
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 of
petroleum
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 and natural
gas
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 had a similar trend when both increased nearly by 40
million
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tonnes
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 and reached 140 and 100
million
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tonnes
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 respectively.
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, around 20
million
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tonnes
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 fluctuated decrease which was the production levels of coal.
This
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 figure
finally
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got
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reached
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 30
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, petroleum, number, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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