Your company has recently introduced a new work uniform. You are mostly happy with the uniform, but there is one thing that you do not like. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter say what you like about the uniform explain what you don’t like about the uniform suggest how the uniform can be improved
Dear Mr Johnson,
I am writing
this
letter to express my interest in the new uniform that you recently announced to us.
To begin
with, I would like to say that the colour is attractive, and it is suitable for the working environment. Also
, it is convenient, as it is not a slim fit.
Unfortunately, the design could be much better. I strongly believe that this
style is old-fashioned. Thus
, it would not be a good idea for our company's reputation. Additionally
, most colleagues are not satisfied with the quality of the fabric that you have used, since it is not durable.
I am willing to request you to hire a consultant group that can assist us in terms of appropriate drawing. Moreover
, it would be a great idea if you asked us about our garment's quality as a survey.
I am eagerly looking forward to hearing your response.
Best Regards,
AliSubmitted by ali.pazoki72 on
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task achievement
Consider expanding on the points you like about the uniform. Mentioning more than just the color and fit will provide a balanced view.
task achievement
When pointing out the negative aspects, try to provide specific examples or evidence to strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea. Splitting the paragraph where you discuss colors and fit from the negative aspects might make your points clearer.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases and connectors to link your ideas more smoothly. This will improve the logical flow of your letter.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a polite and professional tone which is suitable for writing to a manager.
logical structure
The structure of the letter (introduction, main points, and conclusion) is clear and easy to follow.
greeting and closing
Your closing statement is polite and adds a formal touch to the letter.