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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts present the proportions of a variety of resources which produced
electricity
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 in
France
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 and Germany in 2009. In general, non-renewable
energy
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,
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 fossil fuel accounted for the largest number (59.6%) among other resources in Germany in 2009.
In contrast
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 to
France
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, the major
energy
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 was nuclear
power
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 with the number of 76%, and less conventional thermal
energy
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 was used. In terms of renewable
power
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, the German government made use of biomass, water, sun, and wind to produce
electricity
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, of which biomass-producing
power
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 accounted for over one-third proportion(36.9%);
likewise
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,
power
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 produced by wind comprised 36.9%. The percentages of wind and biomass in Germany were probably three times as much as in
France
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 where wind-powered
electricity
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 took up amount of 10.5% and 8.1% was generated by biomass.
On the other hand
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, considerable renewable
energy
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 mainly counted on the water in
France
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 with the number making up 80.5%. Very little
power
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 produced by other clean energies,
such
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 as solar
power
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(0.9%) was applied. In a nutshell, the total
electricity
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 generation(560 kilowatts) made by German plants was larger than that(510 kilowatts) by French plants.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, france, energy, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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