Write about the following topic: The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
for many
people
the most important target of Add a comma
people,
science
is improving people
's lives. in this
essay
I'll tell you Add a comma
essay,
about
my opinion.
from my point of view nowadays Change preposition
apply
science
and technology is
helping Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
to have a better life for example
try
to improve Wrong verb form
trying
of
materials for Remove the preposition
apply
Add an article
the building
a building
building
to assist Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
people
and architect
to have better performance in construction and help Fix the agreement mistake
architects
to
Change preposition
apply
worker
to have safe instruction.
in Fix the agreement mistake
workers
similar
Change the article
a similar
way
Japan government Add a comma
way,
try
to build and invent some new materials to make stronger Wrong verb form
is trying
home
and skydiving as they are in a tsunami and windy climate and they have yearly Fix the agreement mistake
homes
earthquake
that Fix the agreement mistake
earthquakes
happened
Wrong verb form
happen
in
Change preposition
apply
frequent
so they need to improve themselves to avoiding from Change the word
frequently
this
issues.
for another instance, research for a new fuel that can help Correct determiner usage
these
people
to avoid from variety
of Add an article
a variety
population
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populations
which
the most important of Correct pronoun usage
apply
them
is Correct pronoun usage
which
air
population.
in Correct article usage
the air
this
case
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case,
i
think the government and society would cooperate together to use technology and Change the capitalization
I
science
in a keyway
and assist Correct your spelling
key way
people
to live better and in an easier way. although
this
work must have a great plan to be achieved also
need
Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
a
great Correct article usage
apply
cooperate
and great manner between Replace the word
cooperation
people
and politicians.
in my opinion
if the most important aim of Add a comma
opinion,
science
is not be
an improvement for society not only Change the verb form
to be
being
people
will doubt about government because they think they did not gave
any respect from politicians Change the verb form
give
also
the Correct word choice
but also
people
around the world that need those new
Change the determiner
that new science
science
so as these reasons that i
mentioned before Change the capitalization
I
i
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay needs a clearer structure. Start with an introduction stating your position on the topic. Follow with body paragraphs that each discuss a main point supporting your argument, and end with a conclusion summarizing your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and use linking words for better flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples and explanations to support your points. For instance, provide more detailed descriptions of how science has led to specific improvements in people's lives.
Task Achievement
Work on developing more comprehensive and clear ideas. Make sure each point you make is fully explained and directly related to the thesis statement.
Task Achievement
You provide relevant examples related to construction materials and environmental science, which help to illustrate your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a logical order of ideas, moving from the general impact of science to specific instances and then expressing your opinion.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.