The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK  from 2001 and 2008
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British
men
,
women
, and children who consumed five parts of fruits and
vegetables
in a day between 2001 and 2008, an 8-year
period
of time.
Overall
, the
percentage
of
men
consuming fruit and
vegetables
saw an increase
while
women
and children witnessed a decrease over the 8-year
period
. Though there was a decrease,
women
had the highest
percentage
who ate fruit and
vegetables
in the given
period
of time. From 2001 to 2003, the rate remained steady in the consumption of fruits and
vegetables
in terms of
men
from less than 20%.
Then
, the
percentage
increased to more than 20% in 2004 and 27% in 2006.
However
,
men
witness a decline of 1% to around 26%
at the end
of the
period
. Regarding
Women
, there was an upward trend from 2001 to 2006. The proportion of eating fruit and
vegetables
by
women
was just above 20% in 2001 to around 35% in 2006
while
the
percentage
of female consumers declined consistently for the next 2 years to 30%. In terms of children, they saw an upward trend throughout the
period
though, from the beginning of the
period
to 2003, the
percentage
was stable to slightly above 10%.
On the contrary
, there was a decline from approximately 26% in 2007 to around 24% in 2008.
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