The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon
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The pictures illustrate different stages in the life cycle of
salmon
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which is a big and special kind of fish
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, the process includes three main stages, remarkably, the changing of its name and habitat in each stage. It takes about 10 years for the whole process. The life cycle of
salmon
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starts with the hatching of eggs which are laid among reeds and small stones in the slow-moving upper
river
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. Approximately 5 to 6 months after, these eggs hatch into fry with sizes from 3 to 8
cm
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. After getting from 3 to 8cm in length, fry migrate to the fast-flowing lower
river
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where they spend the next 4 years gradually transforming into smolt. These smolt experience the physical development significantly to reach from 12 to 15
cm
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in length.
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, they departure from the lower
river
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to move to the open sea They gain from 70 to 76cm in maximum length when living in the open sea for 5 years. At
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stage, they are specialized red and recognized as adult
salmon
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. After that, adult
salmon
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will turn back upper
river
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where they were born to start the reproduction process
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and begin a new cycle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Spawning
  • Freshwater
  • Juvenile
  • Fry
  • Adaptation
  • Migration
  • Smolt
  • Rivers
  • Ocean
  • Challenge
  • Growth
  • Return journey
  • Hatching ground
  • Perilous
  • Upstream
  • Obstacle
  • Ecological impact
  • Preservation
  • Disturbance
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