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Band 5

Every year several languages die out. Some poeople think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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On our days, the number of native tongues spoken is declining. In
this
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the consequences that losing these
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 will have
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 our cultural heritage and how
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,
loosing
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 a
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 entails the disappearance of the culture
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 to that
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 and that’s irreplaceable. A classical example of
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 the loosing of the Latin
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.
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, a lot of historical information
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 in Latin will be incomprehensive and, for that reason, we will lose a huge amount of historical and cultural data. For these reasons, maintaining the
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 vital for our cultural
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.
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, the societies tied to these
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 may disappear if the
language
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 does. A mother
tongue
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 is a cohesive agent among the population all around the world. And,
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 of the
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 of the native
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tongue
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 those boundaries may disappear,
thus
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 dismembering the society.
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, the Guarani spoken in Perú by the Peruvian natives is a seal of identity among the native communities.
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 of the loosing of the Guarani, the indigenous people will suffer the loss of one of their most valuable heritages.
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 conclusion, the actual number of
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 in danger represents a problem
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 the amount of cultural heritage
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 in danger of being
loose
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 if that
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die
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, the societies that spoke that
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 as a mother
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 may see their bonds disappearing with that
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coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in spelling and avoid minor grammatical errors to enhance readability (e.g., 'losing' instead of 'loosing').
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the conclusion by summarizing the key points and ensuring it aligns well with the arguments made in the essay. The phrase 'on conclusion' should be 'in conclusion'.
task achievement
Use more specific, relevant examples to support your main points for a stronger task achievement score. Include more detail about the real-world consequences of losing languages.
task achievement
Clarify and elaborate on your ideas a bit more to improve clarity and comprehension. For example, explain the link between language and cultural identity in more depth.
introduction
The introduction clearly sets out what the essay will discuss, establishing context well.
supported main points
The essay addresses the importance of languages to cultural heritage and societal cohesion, showcasing a strong understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Intrinsic
  • Diverse viewpoints
  • Innovation
  • Problem-solving
  • Global communication
  • Translation
  • Community disintegration
  • Identity loss
  • Technological solutions
  • Multilingualism
  • Practical communication
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