Every year several languages die out. Some poeople think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
On our days, the number of native tongues spoken is declining. In
this
essay, we will discuss why we should protect the dying languages
and
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languages
will have in
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on
this
will affect our society.
Firstly
, loosing
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tongue
entails the disappearance of the culture bounded
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language
and that’s irreplaceable. A classical example of that is
the loosing of the Latin language
. As a consequence
of thus
, a lot of historical information wrote
in Latin will be incomprehensive and, for that reason, we will lose a huge amount of historical and cultural data. For these reasons, maintaining the Wrong verb form
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Secondly
, the societies tied to these languages
may disappear if the language
does. A mother tongue
is a cohesive agent among the population all around the world. And, as a consequence
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those boundaries may disappear, Add a comma
tongue,
thus
dismembering the society. For example
, the Guarani spoken in Perú by the Peruvian natives is a seal of identity among the native communities. In
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As
consequence
of the loosing of the Guarani, the indigenous people will suffer the loss of one of their most valuable heritages.
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languages
in danger represents a problem due to
the amount of cultural heritage that is
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, the societies that spoke that language
as a mother tongue
may see their bonds disappearing with that tongue
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introduction
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supported main points
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Your opinion
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