You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart represents information about what
are
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children in Australia
doing
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when they have leisure time.
Overall
it can be seen that
,
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most children spend their time
to watch
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watching
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television or video games.
In contrast
, the least activity they do is skateboarding or rollerblading.
To begin
with,
boys
in Australia use
their
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39 per
cent
of their leisure time to play skateboarding or rollerblading.
On the other hand
, the percentage of the
girls
only 23 per
cent
, in the same activity. Afterwards,
boys
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the boys
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at
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there who ride bicycles is 78 per
cent
.
On the contrary
, the
girls
who play
this
only 59 per
cent
. After that, watching TV or video games
are
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is
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the most activity they like. Both
boys
and
girls
have
same
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the same
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percentage, which is 100 per
cent
.
Besides
that, the
boys
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number of boys
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who like to play electronic or computer games is around 81 per
cent
.
However
, the
girls
is
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do
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not too like it because the percentage
just
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is just
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about 60 per
cent
.
On
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In
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the
last
category, the
boys
who like
art
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arts
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and
craft
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crafts
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approximately
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are approximately
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38 per
cent
while
the
girls
59
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are 59
show examples
per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, cent, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure activities
  • popularity
  • participated
  • outdoor activities
  • electronic entertainment
  • gender differences
  • age trends
  • artistic activities
  • cultural trends
  • educational influence
  • group activities
  • individual activities
  • social skills
  • comparison over time
  • statistics
  • surprising findings
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