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The bar chart gives data about the percentage of individuals who ate specific potrion of herbals on a single day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart gives data about the percentage of individuals who ate specific potrion of herbals on a single day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The chart illustrates the percentage of individuals who ate fruits and vegetables five times daily, over the span of 8 years, segregated by gender. At first glance, there can be seen an
overall
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 positive trend. Women have been the highest consumers of fruits & vegetables, retaining the highest share in each year. They
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 had just over 20% and climbed even higher to about 35% in 2006,
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,
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 increase was temporary as the next two years witnessed a steep decline of 5%.
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, men and children had quite similar patterns, both maintaining their recorder levels
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 2004
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 and growing every year slightly till 2006. Children
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 had a higher rate of growth
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 onwards as it continued to reach closer to men.
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, the graph depicts the rise in vegetable consumption in the first decade of the twentieth century amongst everyone, with a small dip after 2006.

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