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The graph below shows in formation about the languages that 13-year-old students in one school chose to study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows in formation about the languages that 13-year-old students in one school chose to study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph reports the numbers of how many British
students
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 chose to learn French or
Mandarin
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 from 2000 to the present. In overview, French has been much more popular than Chinese with
students
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 since 2000.
Besides
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, it was not until 2005 that figures for both
learners
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 in an Eastern language and a Western language stayed small variation. In 2000, over 140 adolescents studied French
in contrast
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 to only about 10
students
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 who learned
Mandarin
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. For the next year, the figure for the
students
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 who learned French fell to 140.
Conversely
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, Chinese
learners
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 rose to 20.
Afterward
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, the number of youngsters who learned Chinese increased,
whereas
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 French
learners
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 decreased progressively until 2005. In 2005, approximately 90 13-year-old
students
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 decided to study French, and about 78
learners
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 selected to speak
Mandarin
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. There was only a difference of 12
students
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. Following that, the figures for
Mandarin
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learners
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 have been spreading in the range of 60-80 from 2005 to the present. Concerning the number of French speakers after 2005, it steadily remained in the range of 80-100.
Finally
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, at present, about 90 adolescents study French, and
Mandarin
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 is spoken by about 70 youngsters.
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