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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the current map of Southwest Airport and the
new
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 redeveloped plan, which is
targetted
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 to be completed by next year. At present, there are two doors, one for departure, and the other for arrivals,
however
, there is a plan to increase a door on both sides. After entering the departure hall, there is a check-in
counter
 on the left, and a
cafe
 on the right, in front of security passport control. By next year, the
cafe
 will be moved to the left making it closer to the gates,
while
 the check-in
counter
 will be at the place of the former
cafe
.
Moreover
, a
seperate
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separate
 bag-drop
counter
 will be introduced on the left-hand side.
Additionally
, some shops will be established past the passport control.
Furthermore
, the number of gates will be increased from 8 to 18, and the walkway will be replaced by a sky train for
further
 convenience. Currently, the hall after crossing passport control customs is empty,
however
, there are plans to build a
cafe
as well as
 to introduce an ATM.
Furthermore
, a car hire service station is planned to be set up by extending the hall area towards the right. In conclusion, as per the renovation plans, the area of the airport will be increased,
along with
 an increase in the number of gates.
Moreover
, additional shops, cafes, an ATM, a bag drop
counter
, and some other facilities would be introduced.
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task achievement
You have provided a detailed response to the task, covering most of the important changes in the airport redevelopment plan. However, ensure all main features are included for maximum completeness.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-organized with clear paragraphs and logical structure, but minor improvements in paragraph transitions could enhance the overall flow.
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain similar levels of detail when describing all changes to ensure balanced coverage.
task achievement
You accurately described the main changes to the airport, including the relocation of the cafe and check-in counter, introduction of new facilities, and increase in the number of gates.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both clear, concise, and provide a good overview of the redevelopment plans.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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