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In a public-funded healthcare system, people who are willing to pay for the best and fast treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
public
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funded
finded
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health
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care
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system
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its
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is
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major
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health
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care
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system
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divided
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in
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into
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is
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are
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 used to reach the
service
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 during
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their
thier
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their
needed
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needs
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specially
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 when they are sick or seek
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help
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help
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other
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another service
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service
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that
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mean
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seek
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for
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this
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 kind of
service
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in
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need
for
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help
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help
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, in my opinion,
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 the public
health
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service
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 should be affordable and
equiel
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equal
 foe all special that group of
pople
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people
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Body paragraph 1
so i think the
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public
pubplic
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public
healthsystem
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health system
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should
shuld
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should
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way
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one
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way
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divided
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service
sercice
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service
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allergy
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health
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issue
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other
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way
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health
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system
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 should seek
the
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health
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 insurance that
affordable
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every
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everyone
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one
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 and will be
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equal
equil
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equal
 for everybody without any
discrimiunation
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discrimination
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for my first my
first
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opinion
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opinion
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health
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care
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system
sysytem
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system
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afilable
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available
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everyone
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every body
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everybody
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because
beacuse
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because
 if all
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population
populations
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the peoplulation
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peoplulation
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population
 can reach
to
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the
health
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care
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system
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 so no more
unficiouse
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unofficious
disease
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diseases
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 and no more sick
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population
poplulation
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population
 that it will be cause any more risk to
the
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apply
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society
socity
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society
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every
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one
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of the public
system
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unattach
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unattached
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unufordable
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unaffordable
 big budget that can
cuse
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cause
 of diseases
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for
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second
secound
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second
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that
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the
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health
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care
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system
sysytem
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system
 should be able to create an affordable
health
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 insurance
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system
sysytem
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system
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equile
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equal
require
 to
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everybody
eveybody
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everybody
 in any case of any disease they are facing
any
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at any
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 time and in that time
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everyone
averyone
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everyone
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be feeling
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feel
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sequre
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secure
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health
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 issue side
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so my opinion will be in reaching all
poeoplulation
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population
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health
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system
sysytem
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system
specially
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especially
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people
poeple
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people
that is
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week
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weak
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 and
frdigle
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fridge
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health
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 insurance
system
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 that can be
reachaple
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reachable
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one
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conclusion
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health
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care
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sysytem
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system
 should be
availbable
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available
 for everyone and
equile
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equal
equine
 and fair for all to prevent any side
effect
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effects
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 that can
cuse
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cause
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sociaty
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society
 from any
infectiouse
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infectious
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purden
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burden
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pople
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people
 who will be cast
alot
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a lot
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finiccal
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financial
finical
statue
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status
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 in the country so we can prevent before it
happen
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happens
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 when we follow the
corect
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correct
way
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 to make the
scocity
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society
health
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 and safe .

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coherence cohesion
The essay could benefit from a clearer structure. Try to have a more defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
Your main points should be more developed and supported with relevant examples or evidence. This helps to make your argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
Be sure to make each paragraph focus on a single point and expand upon it fully before moving to the next point. This will make your essay easier to follow.
task achievement
Address the prompt more directly, making sure to clearly state your agreement or disagreement, and follow through with reasons and examples that support your stance.
coherence cohesion
You have attempted to structure your essay and provide different viewpoints, which is a good start.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion draws a reasonable summary of your thoughts, tying the essay together.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Healthcare system
  • Public-funded
  • Private healthcare
  • Two-tier system
  • Equity
  • Efficiency
  • Universal access
  • Resource allocation
  • Quality of care
  • Queue skipping
  • Economic impact
  • Ethical considerations
  • Accessibility
  • Public investment
  • Health outcomes
  • Social inequality
  • Health insurance
  • Privilege
  • Funding
  • Resource distribution
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