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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.
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The table illustrates the proportion of students attending four types of secondary
schools
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 between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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,
attendance
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 increased in community
schools
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 than in the other three types of
schools
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 from 2000 to 2009.
Although
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initially
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initially,
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 the highest
students
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student
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attendance
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were
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 in Voluntary-controlled
schools
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. In 2000, the highest proportion of
attendance
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 was in voluntary-controlled
schools
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,
whis
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which
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 was 52% and by 2003 had decreased to 20%. The lowest
attendance
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were
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 in
speacialist
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specialist
schools
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 and community
schools
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 in 2000, which
were
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 12%, but despite
this
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,
attendance
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 in community
schools
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 increased to 58% and in specialist
schools
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 declined slightly by 2% in 2009. And,
also
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 during
this
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period
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period,
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 there was a drop in
attendance
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 from 24% to 12% in grammar
schools
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, attendance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • secondary school
  • fluctuations
  • popularity
  • shifts in preference
  • policy changes
  • societal trends
  • comparative analysis
  • data brief
  • observable period
  • notable increases/decreases
  • concluding statement
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