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The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart provides data on the
police
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budget
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, categorized by three different
sources
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 of
income
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 from 2017 to 2018,
along with
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 the distribution of
this
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money
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 including
salaries
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,
technologies
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 and buildings.
Overall
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, it is evident that the main
income
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 of the
police
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budget
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 was from the national
government
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 in both years,
while
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 other
sources
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 were the smallest part. Most of
this
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 revenue was spent on
salaries
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 followed by
technologies
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. In 2017, the
Police
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 had the highest
income
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 from the national
government
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 at 175.5
million
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, far surpassing local taxes and other
sources
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, which account for 91.42
million
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 and 38
million
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, respectively.
This
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 similar trend occurred in the next year, with 177.8
million
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 from the national
government
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 and just only 38.5
million
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 from other
sources
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. Regarding the
money
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 distribution,
Salaries
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 were the largest proportion with 75% in 2017, decreasing to 69% by 2018.
While
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,
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technologies
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 received a constant
budget
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 at 17% in both years, building and transport showed a significant rise, doubling its spending
money
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 from 8% to 14%. In summary, the national
government
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 had the most significant factor in the
police
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's
budget
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,
whereas
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 other
sources
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 had the least
income
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. Most
money
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 was spent on
salaries
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, followed by
technologies
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 and buildings during
this
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 period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, sources, income, money, salaries, technologies, government, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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