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Language
Your essay would benefit from more precise language and correct spelling. Pay attention to words like 'technology', 'assist', 'advanced', 'permits', and 'projects', which have spelling errors in your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your arguments. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and support it with clear and relevant examples.
Task Response
While you have discussed both viewpoints, your essay would improve if you provided more specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Adding statistics, studies, or personal experiences could strengthen your argument.
Task Response
You have a clear understanding of the topic and have addressed both sides of the argument, which is very good.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, and they outline the basic structure of your essay, which helps guide the reader through your argument.