Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. Do the benefit of this mobility out where the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There is no denying the fact that technology has become significant in our
life
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While
it is a commonly held belief that the
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technology
assist
people outside their Correct subject-verb agreement
assists
work
, there is also
an argument that it doesn't help at all whether in work
and
our Correct word choice
or
life
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This
essay will analyse both this
points of view and express my opinion.
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work
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such
as making the work
easier and more accurate. In addition
, it is crucial to ensure these information
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are
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is
work
outside of get
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For example
, if we are to get work
done ,so it is not important place to do the task.
On the other hand
, some people may have
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the workplace
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however
they may have delicate information and sources. Add a comma
however,
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the internet
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their servers , Correct your spelling
accessing
thus
it is better to do work
inside the facility.
In conclusion, there are no easy answers to this
question. On balance, however
, I tend to believe that we must be more awareness
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aware
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mobile
computer
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Language
Your essay would benefit from more precise language and correct spelling. Pay attention to words like 'technology', 'assist', 'advanced', 'permits', and 'projects', which have spelling errors in your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your arguments. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and support it with clear and relevant examples.
Task Response
While you have discussed both viewpoints, your essay would improve if you provided more specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Adding statistics, studies, or personal experiences could strengthen your argument.
Task Response
You have a clear understanding of the topic and have addressed both sides of the argument, which is very good.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, and they outline the basic structure of your essay, which helps guide the reader through your argument.