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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportion of
employment
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,
education
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rate
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 and average revenue in eight European
countries
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 in the year 2015.
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, it is clearly apparent that the
employment
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rate
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 is higher in
Norway
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whereas
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 it the less recorded in Greece. When compared to the
education
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rate
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 and average income of both
countries
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 were higher in
Norway
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. In terms of
Employment
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rate
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 recorded the highest in
Norway
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, which is nearly three quarters (74.8%), and the lowest was registered in Greece with 50.8%.
Uk
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UK
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 and Austria both
countries
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 contribute significant amounts accounting for 72.7% and 71.1% respectively. Other
countries
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 made up more or less between 50% to 70%. When considering the university
education
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 statistics
Norway
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 is the country that
contribute
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 the highest
rate
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 of 43.2%,
while
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 the least was Portugal , which constituted only 22.9% which is half of
Norway
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. Luxemburg and
UK
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the UK
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also
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 recorded a considerable
rate
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 of
education
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 . Even though the
employment
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rate
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 is high in Bulgaria , the average income is less .

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, education, rate, countries, norway with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Higher education attainment
  • Correlation
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Policy implications
  • Gender differences
  • Youth employment
  • Age-segmented
  • Statistics
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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