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The line graph shows the population figure of different types of turtles in india between1980 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.

The line graph shows the population figure of different types of turtles in india between1980 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.
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The graph illustrates the number of turtle
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population
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populations
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 in four different types from 1980 to 2012 in India.
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, it is evident that the
population
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 of all species
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turtles
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of turtles
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 showed the most stable growth throughout the periods. Despite the fluctuations, Olive Ridley
Turtles
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 exhibited an
increase
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 trend,
whereas
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 Leatherback Turtle and Olive
Ridle
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Ridley
 Turtle showed
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population
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a population
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 decrease across the years. In 1980, the
population
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 numbers of all
turtles
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 types were at 100. The number of Olive
Ridle
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Ridley
turtles
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population
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 gradually increased, peaking nearly
to
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apply
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140 by 1997. It
then
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 experienced fluctuation before marginally
dropped
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dropping
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 approximately to 130 by 2012. Meanwhile, all species type of
turtles
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 showed
steadily
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steady
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 variation numbers
around
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of around
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 110 across the years, amounting to roughly 109 in 2012
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, Green
turtles
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 demonstrated increasing
population
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 shifts until 1984, before notably
declined
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declining
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 to just about 90 by the end of
period
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the period
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.
While
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Leatherback
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the Leatherback
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turtles
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turtle
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population
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 rose to just about 110 before 1988, it
then
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 sharply dropped to below 60 by 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph illustrates
  • depicts
  • changes
  • population figures
  • types of turtles
  • Olive Ridley
  • Leatherback
  • Green turtles
  • measured in thousands
  • the highest
  • followed by
  • remained stable
  • significant decline
  • decreased sharply
  • reached its lowest point
  • gradual increase
  • increased steadily
  • experienced a slight decline
  • remained relatively stable
  • fluctuations
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