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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the
percentage
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 of people who live in the
city
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 in four different countries over a period of 50
years
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, and the projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Malaysia has the largest
city
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population
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 over the period shown, and it is anticipated to maintain
this
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trend
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 for future
years
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.
Moreover
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, the
percentage
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 of
city
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population
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 in four countries has risen over 50
years
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 (1970-2020) In 1970, Malaysia and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the same urban
population
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 about of 30%,
while
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 Thailand with approximately 20% was the third country, and Indonesia had the lowest
percentage
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 of 13%. After ten
years
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, in 1980, the
percentage
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 of the urban
population
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 in Malaysia rose dramatically to a peak of 78% in 2020, and is projected to continue
this
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trend
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 and will touch 85% in 2040. The
percentage
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 of the
city
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population
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 in both Indonesia and Thailand experienced an upward
trend
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 and had the same urban
population
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percentage
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 in 2000, but after that, the growth of Indonesia was noticeable to reach 50% in 2020 and is projected to touch 65% in 2040.
In contrast
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, the urban
population
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 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had a
fluctuation
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fluctuating
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trend
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 from 1970 to 2020 with the maximum
percentage
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 by 1990 being around 50% and is predicted to increase and experience 52% by 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, city, years, population, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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