The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart illustrates the number of
people
in the United States with heart
attack
by gender and Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
age
. Overall
, people
are more likely to suffer from heart
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a heart
attack
as they age
especially
from the middle Add the comma(s)
, especially
age
. The number of male
is higher than that of Change to a plural noun
males
female
in all the Fix the agreement mistake
females
age
groups.
Starting with the graph for male
, there are 123 Fix the agreement mistake
males
thousands
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thousand
of
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apply
people
from 29 to 44 with heart
attack
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attacks
whereas
the number suddenly jumps to 424 thousands
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thousand
of
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apply
people
for 45
to 64 Correct article usage
the 45
age
group
. There is not a significant change when they reach 65 with a minor increase although
the gap between male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
reduces in a dramatic way.
Turning to the figure for Fix the agreement mistake
females
female
, only 3 Fix the agreement mistake
females
thousands
of the youngest Correct your spelling
thousand
age
group
from 29 to 44 are diagnosed with heart
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a heart
attack
. Those who are from 45 to 64 tend to suffer from it more with 136 thousands
, making it comparatively lower than male
in the same Fix the agreement mistake
males
age
group
. However
, the graph experiences a radical increase with 374 thousands
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thousand
in contrast
to the graph for male
with a slight change between the Fix the agreement mistake
males
age
group
of 45 to 64 and over 65.Submitted by mizuho on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, heart, attack, age, thousands, group with synonyms.
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