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Some think that societies should take action to fight climate change, while others believe it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#think #societies #action #fight #climate #change
Agree- fight climate
change-because
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change because
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 animals are getting extinct-melting glaciers and polar
bear
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bears
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, amazon wildfire Learn to live with it- governments make decisions Some argue that there are benefits to society to
go
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going
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 about climate change without doing anything about it, others suggest that there should be
strong
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a strong
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 rebuttal on a societal level.
While
 the public should accept
this
 environmental hazard because it is the state heads who
take
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make
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 the decision to act or not, I believe fighting has more merits
to
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apply
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it
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apply
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becuase
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because
 it fosters environmental preservation.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay needs a clearer logical structure. Use well-defined paragraphs: an introduction, body paragraphs each discussing a single idea, and a conclusion to tie it all together.
task achievement
Ensure that both perspectives are thoroughly discussed. Explain why some people think it's better to live with climate change and provide specific examples or reasons to support this view.
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Expand on your environmental arguments. For instance, explain the importance of preserving animal species and the broader impact of climate change on ecosystems, or provide more examples of climate change effects like melting glaciers and wildfires.
general
Proofread your essay for spelling and grammatical errors. Phrases like "there should be strong rebuttal" are incorrect; instead, write "there should be strong action taken," and replace "becuase" with "because."
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You have addressed the key points of the prompt and provided some supporting arguments for each perspective.
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Your stance is clear and consistent, showing a strong viewpoint advocating for fighting climate change.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • emissions reduction
  • environmental policies
  • sustainable practices
  • reforestation
  • public awareness
  • adaptation
  • infrastructure
  • extreme weather
  • drought-resistant crops
  • economic impacts
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