The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and

Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts show six categories of
energy
capacity
in
gigawats
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gigawatts
gigawatt
in 2012 and in 2030.
Overall
, fossil fuels, renewables and nuclear will decrease
while
other
energy
capacities
such
as wind, solar and flexibility
capacity
will increase.
According to
the first pie
chart
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chart,
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the highest
percent point
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percentage
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of fossil fuels was 64%,
renewables
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and renewables
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had almost
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a quater
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quater
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quarter
of all
energy
capacity
.
Moreover
, wind and nuclear had particularly the same percentages 5% and 6% respectively.
Other
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2 categories: solar and flexibility
capacity
was
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were
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allocated
on
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at
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2% and 1%. In 2030,
by
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scientists
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prediction,
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prediction
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the situation will change. Fossil fuels will stay a leader with 44%. Solar
willl
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will
have a significant increase from 2% to 18%,
also
wind will increase too from 5% to 12%,
while
renewables will lose 3
percent
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per cent
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points. Flexible
capacity
will show
a
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stability without significant changes, the same situation with nuclear. In conclusion,
the
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half of all categories will be changed
on
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no more than 3%,
while
other
energy
capacities will
hace
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have
a significant changes
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significant changes
a significant change
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both positively and negatively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, capacity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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