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The chart below gives information about the journeys to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year.

The chart below gives information about the journeys to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year.
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The provided bar chart gives information on the different types of vehicles that
utilized
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 in order to get
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school
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to school
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,namely walking,bicycle,car and bus. The units are measured in per cent. Generally speaking, it is evident that the vast majority of individuals walked to
school
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 rather than used contemporary vehicles for transportation. First and foremost, it is evident that 90% of journeys to
school
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made
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are made
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 by walking in the
distance
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 of 0-1
miles
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.
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a
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half of them walked at 1-2
miles
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,whilst approximately 25% of individuals walked in 2-5
miles
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. With regards to the bicycle, it is noticeable that 50% of all journeys that made at the
distance
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 of 0-1
miles
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,
when
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while
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 journeys at
the
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a
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distance
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 of 1-2
miles
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 reached the apex at nearly 78%. Taking
closer
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 look
to
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at
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 the modern appliance of
trsnsportstion
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transportation
, it is evident that approximately 10% of individuals
used
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 to reach
destination
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their destination
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 at 0-1 mile comprised 10%,whilst 30% reached 1-2
miles
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 and those who reached
the
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a
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distance
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 over 5
miles
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 comprised 20%. Notwithstanding
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 types of vehicles that were used to reach
school
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 by students, public transport,namely
bus
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the bus
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,
,
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that
ridden
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ridded
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tge
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the
distance
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 over 5
miles
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 reached the vertex at 70%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, distance, miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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