The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
consumption
of fish and
also
some different kinds of meat which is [ Lamb ,
Beef
,
Chicken
] in
a European nations
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a European nation
European nations
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over 25 years from 1979 to 2004. Units are measured in grams per person per
weak
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week
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.
Overall
, it is obvious that the
consumption
of
beef
, lamb, and fish went down over the given years,
while
for
chicken
, it went up. In the first 15 years
beef
was the most popular meat which was
chicken
from 1949 to 2004 the most consumed food in the final
year
. With regards to the
consumption
of
beef
, it started at almost 225 in 1979 and
then
decline
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declined
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at
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to
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around 100 in the final
year
.
Similarly
, lamb
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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began at nearly 150 in the first
year
and
then
went down
at
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a
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alittle
Correct your spelling
a little
more than 50 in 2004.
Likewise
, fish
it
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apply
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started at about 50 in 1979 and
then
decreased to
alittle
Correct your spelling
a little
less than 50 in the final
year
.
On the other hand
, as for the
consumption
of
chicken
, it started at just over 150 in 1979 after which it rocketed to just below 250 in the final
year
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beef, chicken, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.

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  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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