The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
The two
bars
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bar
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graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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the references for
students
to pursue their
study
program and how much
support
they gain from employers over four different
group
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groups
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of ages. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
students
that opt
study
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to study
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for their career needs showed a downward trend as soon as they get older, whilst
study
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studying
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for interest needs
were
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becoming popular when the
students
in the oldest
age
group
.
On the other hand
,
students
had
a
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the
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biggest
support
from their
colleges
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colleagues
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under 26
years
and the lowest
support
from
30
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the 30
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-39
age
group
. In terms of the reasons for
study
, the
students
under 40
years
were choose
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chose
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to
study
due to
their career growth started at precisely 80% under 26
years
and showed a significant
decreased
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decrease
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by around 12% of
30
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the 30
show examples
-39
age
of
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group
.
Then
, they remained similar
at
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in
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percentages in
40
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the 40
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-49
age
of
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group
at exactly 40%, whilst they changed their references to interest needs in
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the group
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group
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groups
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of
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over 49
years
old at precisely 70%. Regarding
of
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the employer’s
support
, the
students
had a huge
support
from their
co-worker
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co-workers
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under 26
years
old for just above 60% and witnessed a gradual decline over the oldest
age
group
from 26-29
years
old to 30-39
years
old by nearly 30%.
However
,
this
figure increased gradually from approximately 35% in
40
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the 40
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-49
age
of
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apply
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group
and reached
at
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apply
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40% over 49
years
old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, support, group, age, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Adult education
  • Career advancement
  • Personal enrichment
  • Academic pursuits
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Educational attainment
  • Tuition reimbursement
  • Flexible work arrangements
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial assistance
  • Professional growth
  • Study leave
  • Employee retention
  • Workforce development
  • Time management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivational factors
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