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Band 3.5

Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Some believe that having more police on the streets is the best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree?

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In some nations, illegal activities have firmly increased. It is often argued that decreasing the
crime
 rate on subways is controlled by the
police
 force.
However
, I believe
police
 officers are not the only ones who are key to addressing the
crime
. In
this
 essay, I will give
number
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a number
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 of reasons for how to ensure the safety of locals. To commence with, road
police
having
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have
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 several pros to control the traffic. To explicate it,
police
 catch criminals on time without any permission from the government because they have the authority to take immediate
action
.
Moreover
, they comfort locals by providing security and peace in the respective locations where they are allocated their duties.
For example
,
police man
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policeman
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 in the United Kingdom
take
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 immediate
action
 when they depict any harmful content.
As a result
, a
police
 officer is a part of society to reduce the
crime
 ratio.
In addition
, there are myriads of ways to control the dangerous actions.
Furthermore
, the governments should
immplants
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implement
 CCTV cameras, make strict rules for any
rules
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rule
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 breakers, and give publically punishment that
influence
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influences
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 other local people because it will help to reduce
crime
action
.
For instance
, in Japan and South Korea, their governments implant cameras everywhere and take immediate
action
.
Therefore
, locals should
also
 have defence
action
 in any harsh conditions.
To sum up
, for the aforementioned reasons, officers of law conflict their duties with courage and honesty but people should take care of
their self
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themself
themselves
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 in any contagious condition.
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction is clearly related to the main topic. Mention that police presence can deter crime overall, not just on subways.
task achievement
Provide a more balanced perspective on the role of police and other measures. Clearly state both sides before concluding.
task achievement
Strengthen the support for your points with more specific and relevant examples. Avoid using vague terms such as 'harmful content.'
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your ideas. Ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next.
coherence cohesion
Clarify and expand on the examples provided. Explain how they specifically relate to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Good structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Addressed both the importance of police and other measures in combating crime.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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