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46.The table below shows the amount of waste production (in million tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

46.The table below shows the amount of waste production (in million tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates what
did
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the UK unemployed spent their
time
 on
last
 year.
Overall
,
both
men
 and
women
 in the UK
last
 year
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 different most and least done activities in the mornings,
while
 in the afternoon
both
men
 and
women
 spent
least
Correct article usage
the least
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 of their
time
 staying in bed. In the morning
men
 spent most of their
time
 on job hunting with 22% and least on drinking with 2%,
while
women
 spent most of their
time
 on housework with approximately 50% and least on playing sports and drinking with
both
 1%. In the afternoon
men
 spent most of their
time
 on TV
with
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at
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 4% and
least
Correct article usage
the least
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on
Change preposition
apply
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staying
bed
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in bed
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with
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at
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 1%,
while
women
 spent most of their
time
 on housework
with
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at
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 21% and least
on
Change preposition
apply
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staying
bed
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in bed
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 and playing
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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with
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at
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both
 0%.
Women
 spent
same
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the same
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 amount of
time
 on decorating, walking, nothing/sitting around in the morning with 3%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, both, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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