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The graph below shows the population of Chile by age group between 1975 and 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of Chile by age group between 1975 and 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates past and future Chile’s demographic information divided into three different age groups from 1975 to 2035, over a period of 60
years
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. In general terms, it can be clearly seen that
people
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 from 16 to 64
years
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 old account for the biggest proportion of the population,
while
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 the oldest
group
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 is the smallest population.
In addition
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, the percentage of citizens over 64 has
been
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consistently increased and is expected to get even bigger.
By contrast
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, the proportion of
people
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 under 15 has been plummeting and is projected to continue to do so. Turning to the graph in more detail, in 1975,
people
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 between 15 and 64
years
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 old comprised
of
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51% of the population,
whereas
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 39% of the middle-aged
group
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 and
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5% of
 the oldest
group
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. By 2015, the figures for all groups gradually increased except for
that
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 of citizens under 15
years
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. Meanwhile, the proportion of citizens below 15 age reached a peak of 70%. By 2035, the percentage of the middle-aged
group
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 has experienced a descent of 10% and is anticipated to decrease constantly. In the meantime, the youngest
group
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 is
also
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 predicted to decline to the extent of the figure of
people
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 over 64.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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