The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie charts display the percentage of regular meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, which are considered
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harmful
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people's health when consumed too much.
Overall
,
breakfast
has the lowest
amount
of all three unhealthy ingredients whilst
dinner
and
snacks
are both
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threatening
the life of
heman
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human
beings. First of all,
breakfast
and
snacks
have the same percentage of sodium with 14%, whilst lunch includes more than double with 29%.
Dinner
has the highest
amount
of sodium with 43%, which is more than triple
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breakfast
and
snacks
.
Secondly
,
breakfast
includes the lowest
amount
of saturated fats with 16%.
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and lunch are
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by
including
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21% and 26% respectively.
However
,
dinner
has
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higher percentage of
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saturated fats with 37%.
On the other hand
,
snacks
includes
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42% of added sugar, which is almost double of
dinner
has.
Breakfast
and lunch include almost the same
amount
of added sugar which
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16% and 19% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words breakfast, amount, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrient breakdown
  • average percentage
  • excessive consumption
  • health risks
  • sodium
  • saturated fats
  • added sugars
  • hypertension
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • contribution
  • comparison
  • meal types
  • dietary balance
  • nutritional value
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