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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the feedback of
survey
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the survey
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 about people's
coffee
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 and
tea
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 purchasing and their drinking habits in 5 Australian cities. First of all, Melbourne and Hobart have the biggest amount of
residents
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 who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks and the proportion of
residents
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is
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apply
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accounted for about 63%.In comparison,purchasing instant
coffee
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 or
tea
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for
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in
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 these cities is lower,about 47nand 55 % respectively.Buying fresh
coffee
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,
however
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,
as well as
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 purchasing instant
coffee
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 is
also
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 in lower positions for city
residents
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 (43% and 37%)respectively. Sydney's
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residents
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resident's
residents'
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 attendance to the cafe for drinks is close to Melbourne and Hobart,even though it
is accounted
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accounts
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 for 60%.Buying instant and fresh
coffee
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 is approximately
on
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apply
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the same percentage(45%).Brisbane and Adelaide are the cities which have the lowest percentage of
residents
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 who generally consume
the
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apply
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coffee
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.
For instance
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,in Brisbane
residents
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 who buy
coffee
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 and
tea
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 or
going
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go
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 to cafes are approximately 50%.Adelaide has shown the same proportion.
Moreover
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, buying fresh fresh
coffee
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is
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apply
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only accounted for 35%.
Overall
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,Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart have the most amount of
residents
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 who consume
coffee
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,especially attending cafes,
while
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 Brisbane and Adelaide
has
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have
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 shown the least percentage of
resident
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residents
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 who consume
coffee
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 or
tea
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, residents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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