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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the feedback of
survey
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the survey
show examples
 about people's
coffee
 and
tea
 purchasing and their drinking habits in 5 Australian cities. First of all, Melbourne and Hobart have the biggest amount of
residents
 who went to a cafe for
coffee
 or
tea
 in
last
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the last
show examples
 4 weeks and the proportion of
residents
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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accounted for about 63%.In comparison,purchasing instant
coffee
 or
tea
for
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in
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 these cities is lower,about 47nand 55 % respectively.Buying fresh
coffee
,
however
,
as well as
 purchasing instant
coffee
 is
also
 in lower positions for city
residents
 (43% and 37%)respectively. Sydney's
residents
Change to a genitive case
resident's
residents'
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 attendance to the cafe for drinks is close to Melbourne and Hobart,even though it
is accounted
Wrong verb form
accounts
show examples
 for 60%.Buying instant and fresh
coffee
 is approximately
on
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apply
show examples
the same percentage(45%).Brisbane and Adelaide are the cities which have the lowest percentage of
residents
 who generally consume
the
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apply
show examples
coffee
.
For instance
,in Brisbane
residents
 who buy
coffee
 and
tea
 or
going
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go
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 to cafes are approximately 50%.Adelaide has shown the same proportion.
Moreover
, buying fresh fresh
coffee
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
only accounted for 35%.
Overall
,Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart have the most amount of
residents
 who consume
coffee
,especially attending cafes,
while
 Brisbane and Adelaide
has
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have
show examples
 shown the least percentage of
resident
Fix the agreement mistake
residents
show examples
 who consume
coffee
 or
tea
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, residents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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