Computer Games are very popular in all ages and nationalities. Parents think, it has a little educational value and more harmful. Discuss your opinion with examples.

The popularity of computer games among the young generation is increasing day by day. Parents believe that the educational value of computer games is very little, and it is more harmful. I personally agree with
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because I believe that computer games have made us aggressive and hamper our concentration.
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Expand on your ideas: Provide more detailed explanations and support your points with specific examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your structure: Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs each focused on a single main idea, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use of cohesive devices: Utilize a variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and ensure your essay flows logically.
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Clear introduction: You have a clear introduction that sets up your argument.
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Concise writing: Your writing is concise and to the point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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