The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The diagram illustrates the variation in the manufacturing of three dominant combustibles in the UK, over a period of time from 1981 to 2000.
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the three combustibles, two kinds of them, Petroleum and Natural Gas, have increased during the two decades, and only one – Coal – has a drastic fall, from 80 Energy Units to 35 Energy Units. Apparently, Petroleum is the main type of combustible produced from 1981 with a peak of 140
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in 1986, followed by a decrease
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100
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in 1990. After that, in 1991 the
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of Petroleum increased
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to 145
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in 1999, with a slight decrease to 140
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in 2000.
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, the manufacture of Natural gas had a stable
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of 40
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until 1990. After that, the manufacture grew to 100
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in 2000. In conclusion, the
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of all three types of fuels
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oscillated strongly during
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period of time. Two of them have increased the
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of combustibles, and only one has decreased its
production
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words eu, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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