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The mapping pictures illustrate the floor plan of a former central library 20 years ago compared to this day.

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The mapping pictures illustrate the
floor
 plan of a former central library 20 years ago compared to
this
 day.
According to
 the older version, the
floor
 is composed of four
rooms
 surrounding round tables and chairs
the
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located in the
center
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 of
this
floor
. There
room
including
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reading
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the reading
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room
, video
room
, children’s
room
 and Enquiry desk, which has bookcases of adult fiction
books
 and Adult non-fiction
books
 located between the
rooms
at
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West
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the West
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 and East
side
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. In the present day, there are many additional furniture and
replacement
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replacements
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.
For example
,
Video
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the Video
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rooms
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room
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 now
was
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 replaced by
children’s
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a children’s
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 fiction
room
 with
sofa
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a sofa
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 inside and
former
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the former
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children
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children's
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room
 now is
lecture
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a lecture
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room
instead
. Reading
room
are
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is
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 switch to
computer
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the computer
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room
 and café is replace on old enquiry desk.
New
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 version shows the
removing
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 of round tables at the
center
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centre
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 and
add
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adds
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information
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an information
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 desk
in
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 the right side of the
floor
,
while
 adult fiction
books
is
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are
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 at the East now. In conclusion, several renovations and replacements
occur
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 during 20 years, the major difference is a switching and changes
the
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 type of
books
 inside the
rooms
, which is suitable for more modern customers.
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task response
Ensure more comprehensive descriptions of all features in both the past and present floor plans. Mention all changes in a logical order to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the coherence and flow by making smoother transitions between the old and new layouts. Connect sentences and ideas more effectively.
lexical resource
Revise and proofread to avoid grammatical errors and awkward phrasings. Check for subject-verb agreement and article usage.
task response
Clear attempt to describe the changes between the old and new versions of the library.
coherence and cohesion
Presence of an introduction and a conclusion, framing the essay well.
lexical resource
Use of some specific details, such as naming different rooms and their new purposes.

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