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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the table illustrates the immigrant
workers
 in
temporary
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the temporary
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 over
period
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a period
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in
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of
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 3
year
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years
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 from 2003 until 2006, and the
number
 of
workers
 per 1000 people in 2006 divided into four countries namely Australia, New
Zealand
, the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 and the
usa
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USA
.
overall
, it can be seen that the highest migrant
workers
 in 2003
was
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were
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the
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in the
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united states
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United States
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 of
america
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America
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, and the lowest was
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in new
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new
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New Zealand
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zealand
,
while
 in 2006 still remain the highest was
the
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in the
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USA
. Meanwhile, the
number
 of
workers
 per 1,000 people in 2016 the biggest
workers
was
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were
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in new
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new
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New Zealand
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zealand
, and the lowest was
the
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in the
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united states
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United States
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. In
details
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detail
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, in 2003 the
USA
 migrant
workers
 was 577,000 and increased in 2006
around
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 678,000,
following
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followed
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 by Australia was 152,000 migrant
workers
 and slightly
increase
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increased
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 in 2006
about
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to about
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 219,000
workers
,
besides
 that, the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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 was 137,000
migran
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migrant
workers
 and
rised
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raised
rise
rose
 around 266,000 in 2006, and the lowest temporary migrant
workers
 was new
zealand
 about 65,000 and uplifted around 87,000 in 2006.
Moreover
, the
number
of
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per 1000 people in 2006, the biggest was
new
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New Zealand
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zealand
 with
number
 21,1, followed by
australia
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Australia
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 around 10,7 and the
united
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United
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kingom
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Kingdom
 and the
usa
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USA
 around 4,4 and 2,4 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, number, zealand, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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