The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the table illustrates the immigrant
workers
in
temporary
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the temporary
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over
period
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a period
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in
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of
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3
year
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years
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from 2003 until 2006, and the
number
of
workers
per 1000 people in 2006 divided into four countries namely Australia, New
Zealand
, the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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and the
usa
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USA
.
overall
, it can be seen that the highest migrant
workers
in 2003
was
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were
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the
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in the
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united states
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United States
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of
america
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America
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, and the lowest was
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in new
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new
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New Zealand
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zealand
,
while
in 2006 still remain the highest was
the
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in the
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USA
. Meanwhile, the
number
of
workers
per 1,000 people in 2016 the biggest
workers
was
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were
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in new
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new
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New Zealand
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zealand
, and the lowest was
the
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in the
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united states
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United States
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. In
details
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, in 2003 the
USA
migrant
workers
was 577,000 and increased in 2006
around
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678,000,
following
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followed
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by Australia was 152,000 migrant
workers
and slightly
increase
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increased
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in 2006
about
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219,000
workers
,
besides
that, the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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was 137,000
migran
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migrant
workers
and
rised
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raised
rise
rose
around 266,000 in 2006, and the lowest temporary migrant
workers
was new
zealand
about 65,000 and uplifted around 87,000 in 2006.
Moreover
, the
number
of
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apply
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per 1000 people in 2006, the biggest was
new
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New Zealand
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zealand
with
number
21,1, followed by
australia
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Australia
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around 10,7 and the
united
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United
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kingom
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Kingdom
and the
usa
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USA
around 4,4 and 2,4 respectively.
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