The diagram below show the stages in the recycling of aluminum drinks can.
The provided diagram illustrates the
process
of how recycling aluminium
beverage cans
.
In general, that is
a largely mechanical process
that includes three main stages, beginning with collecting cans
from bins and ending with supplying products for vending machines.
Having looked at the given chart for more details, first of all, wasted cans
which are thrown by residents are collected from the bins and put into boxes loaded onto trucks. Secondly
, these trucks will deliver the wasted cans
to recycled factories or firms where the cans
will be compressed into blocks.
Next,
the process
continues with these blocks experiencing a recycling plant. Firstly
, old aluminium
is melted down and transferred into new aluminium
. Then
, aluminium
sheets are flattened and rolled into new cans
. After that, these recycled cans
will be transported to the drinks machine. Finally
, inhabitants buy the aluminium
beverage cans
from the wedding machines and the process
starts again.Submitted by ieltswritingpracticedl on
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