The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999

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The line graph

illustreres

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illustrates

illustrious

visitors to and from

british

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Britain

between 1979 to 1999.

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the bar chart gives information about the most famous nations visited by

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residents

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in 1999.

overall

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, it is clear from the bar graph that

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France topped the

countires

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countries

visited by

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sidents

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residents

in 1999 ,

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the

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Turkey was the lowest

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. The number of

visits

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abroad by

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residents

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increased sharply over the given period .

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visits

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to the

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by overseas

residents

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up gradually. The number of people who

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visits

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abroad by

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residents

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in 1979 increased from around 14

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to exactly 20

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after 1984 it

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rose

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quickly to more than 50

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. In 1979 the

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visits

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number of visits

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to the

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by overseas

residents

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were 10

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millions

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, and it

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went

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up gradually over

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time until it

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around 28

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millions

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. The

most

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Popular

Country

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visited was more than 10 million it was

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visitors. In the second top

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was

spain

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and it was less than 10

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millions

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USA

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the USA

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and Greece

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nearly 4 to 5

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millions

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million

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apply

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visitors respectively. In 1999 the lowest

country

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where visited by

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residents

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was Turkey.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

205 words

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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999

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