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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many
visitors
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 travelled to a particular Caribbean
island
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 and stayed on
cruise
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 ships or on
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island
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the island
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 itself during the course of 7
years
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, commencing from 2010.
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, the
number
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 of total
tourists
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 experienced an increase throughout the
years
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.
Cruise
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 ships eventually rose starting
from
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in
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 2012
while
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 the
trend
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 of staying on
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island
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the island
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 saw fluctuations over the
years
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. From 2010 to 2012, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 saw a gradual climb, increasing
in
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by
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 50% of its value. In the same time period,
visitors
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 who
prefers
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prefer
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 remained unchanged until 2011, and
then
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 it had the same
trend
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 as the
the
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total
number
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 of
visitors
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, reaching nearly 1.2
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millions
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million
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of individuals on
cruise
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 experienced a slight upward
trend
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 following the downward
trend
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, so basically its values in 2010 and 2012 are the same: approximately 250
thousands
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thousand
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.
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, it had
a
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considerable growth and
reach
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reached
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 its peak in 2017, maintaining
for
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apply
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2
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tourists
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, which resembles the
trend
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 of the total
number
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 of
the
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Caribbean
tourists
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,
that
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which
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hitted
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hit
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 its high in 2017, accounting for
the
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an
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 index of 3.5
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millions
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million
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. In
the
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contrast,
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 marginally went up to 1.5
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millions
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million
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 in 2013 and kept its plateau for 2 more
years
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.
Next,
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it experienced a dip, resulting in 1.5
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people in 2017 that stayed on
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island
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the island
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. The numerical index of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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 ships and
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 leveled off between 2015 and 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, cruise, years, number, tourists, trend, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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