The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many
visitors
travelled to a particular Caribbean
island
and stayed on
cruise
ships or on
island
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the island
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itself during the course of 7
years
, commencing from 2010.
Overall
, the
number
of total
tourists
experienced an increase throughout the
years
.
Cruise
ships eventually rose starting
from
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2012
while
the
trend
of staying on
island
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saw fluctuations over the
years
. From 2010 to 2012, the total
number
of
tourists
saw a gradual climb, increasing
in
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by
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50% of its value. In the same time period,
visitors
who
prefers
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staying on
island
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the island
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remained unchanged until 2011, and
then
it had the same
trend
as the
the
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total
number
of
visitors
, reaching nearly 1.2
millions
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million
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.
However
, the
number
of individuals on
cruise
experienced a slight upward
trend
following the downward
trend
, so basically its values in 2010 and 2012 are the same: approximately 250
thousands
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.
Nevertheless
, it had
a
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considerable growth and
reach
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its peak in 2017, maintaining
for
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2
millions
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million
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of
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tourists
, which resembles the
trend
of the total
number
of
the
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Caribbean
tourists
,
that
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hitted
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its high in 2017, accounting for
the
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index of 3.5
millions
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million
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. In
the
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contrast,
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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marginally went up to 1.5
millions
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million
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in 2013 and kept its plateau for 2 more
years
.
Next,
it experienced a dip, resulting in 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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people in 2017 that stayed on
island
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the island
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. The numerical index of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships and
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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leveled off between 2015 and 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, cruise, years, number, tourists, trend, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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