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Task 1 : The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

Task 1 : The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the
car
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 changes in the percentage in one European country from 1971 to 2001. As can be seen, the households who did not have a
car
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was decrease
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decreased
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 gradually, there was a dramatic increase in the proportion of cars
with
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among
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european's
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european
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people
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.
However
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,
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people
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for people
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 who owned two cars, the
car
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 rate fluctuated during the given period. The percentage of households with no
car
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 was almost reached to 50% in 1971.
Then
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, there was a significant drop in the middle of
period
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the period
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 with less than 45% and 30% exactly in 1981,
1991
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and 1991
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 respectively. In the year 2001, the
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people
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number of people
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 who did not drive declined to less than a third. Turning to the maximum rate of individuals with one
car
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 at just over 45% in 1991 and just under 45% in 2001. In the years 1971 and 1981,
people
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 with one
car
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 had approximately a third.
Finally
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, there number of
people
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had
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who had
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 two cars
were
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was
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unstable
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an unstable
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 percentage that fluctuated from 15% to less than 30% between 1971 to 2001.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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