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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The graphs illustrate the data
of
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on
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police
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the police
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budget
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 in a specific city in the United Kingdom in two years 2017 and 2018, and the
amount
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 of money they spent on three
sectores
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sectors
 ( salaries, technology, and building and transport). The units are measured in
pound
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pounds
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.
Overall
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, the
amount
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 of
police
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budget
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 increased gradually in national government and local taxes,
while
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 other sources
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budget
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budgets
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 remained stable.
Furthermore
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, the highest
amount
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 of money was spent on salaries,
however
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, the least
amount
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 of
expendture
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expenditure
 was on technology. The main source of
police
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 income was from
national
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the national
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 government
by
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apply
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175,5
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millions
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million
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 in 2017
,
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 and
then
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 increased to 177,8
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millions
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million
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.
Moreover
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, the local taxes
was
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were
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 the second highest
amount
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 of
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police
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the police
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budget
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was
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apply
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91.2
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millions
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million
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 in the first year and rose to 102.3
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millions
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million
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 in the
last
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 year.
While
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others
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other
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 sources
was
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were
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 38
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millions
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million
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 in both years.
Police
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 spent most of the
budget
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 on salaries nearly three
quarter
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quarters
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overall
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 in 2017, and
then
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 dropped to 69% in 2018.
However
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, the least
amount
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 of money was spent on technology with only 8% in 2017 and
then
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 surged to 14% in 2018. Building and transport took only 17% of the
budget
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 throughout the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, amount, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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