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The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.

The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.
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The graphs illustrate the data about individuals' travel journey in a specific country over 20 years, and how they
traveled
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travelled
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 between 1995 and 2015.
Overall
, the difference between
a
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the
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 distance and the time it took was bigger in the beginning years, but it reduced throughout
ther
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the
 period.
Furthermore
, most of the
people
 used private transport,
while
 the lowest number used public transport. In terms of the distance
of
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travelled and time taken, it started at around 6700 miles in above 380
houres
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hours
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 in 1995, but
this
 difference
reduced
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 in 2005, they travelled 7100 in about 390
hourse
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hours
. In the
last
 years,
people
 moved to around 6600 miles in just above 365
houres
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hours
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. With regards to the mode of travel, individuals who travelled by private
vehicales
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vehicles
vehicle
62
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 and increased to 65 in ( 1995 and 2015 respectively).
In contrast
, only 28
people
who
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travelled by walking or cycling in 1995, which
was
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dropped to 24 in 2015.
In addition
, the number of
people
 who moved by public transport was 9 in 1995 and increased to 11 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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