The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.

#information #water #consumption #kilolitre #property #australian #cities #sydney #perth #adelaide #brisbane #melbourne #canberra #year #distribution

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The graphs illustrate the data about individuals' travel journey in a specific country over 20 years, and how they

traveled

Change the spelling

travelled

show examples

between 1995 and 2015.

Overall

, the difference between

Correct article usage

the

show examples

distance and the time it took was bigger in the beginning years, but it reduced throughout

ther

Correct your spelling

the

period.

Furthermore

, most of the

people

used private transport,

while

the lowest number used public transport. In terms of the distance

Change preposition

apply

show examples

travelled and time taken, it started at around 6700 miles in above 380

houres

Correct your spelling

hours

show examples

in 1995, but

this

difference

reduced

Add a missing verb

was reduced

show examples

in 2005, they travelled 7100 in about 390

hourse

Correct your spelling

hours

. In the

last

years,

people

moved to around 6600 miles in just above 365

houres

Correct your spelling

hours

show examples

. With regards to the mode of travel, individuals who travelled by private

vehicales

Correct your spelling

vehicles

vehicle

Add a missing verb

were 62

show examples

and increased to 65 in ( 1995 and 2015 respectively).

In contrast

, only 28

people

who

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

travelled by walking or cycling in 1995, which

was

Unnecessary verb

apply

show examples

dropped to 24 in 2015.

In addition

, the number of

people

who moved by public transport was 9 in 1995 and increased to 11 in 2015.

Submitted by saja.alotaibi on Wed Sep 11 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

▼

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

177 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood
I believe that child-rearing should be the responsibility of both parents and that, whilst the roles within that partnership may be different, they are nevertheless equal in importance. In some societies, it has been made easier over the years for single parents to raise children on their own. However, this does not mean that the traditional family, with both parents providing emotional support and role-models for their children, is not, the most satisfactory way of bringing up children.
5
band
The plans below show a public Park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In 1920, there were two entrances near both Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street, it is the same today along with an additional entrance from the underground car park. When walking into the park from the Eldon Street entrance in 1920, people would see a fountain in the middle of the park, but now, the fountain has been replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats on four sides which were once placed around the park. In addition, on the right side, the glasshouse alongside the wall in 1920 had also been removed, and a water feature took up its place. And on the left side, the rose garden is completely gone. Moreover, to the left of the fountain, there used to be a stage for musicians, but now an amphitheatre replaced it for concerts, taking up more space than the old structure.
<4
band
The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?
With the rise of social media platforms people could easily to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. I want to talk about its consequences and its benefits in this essay.
4.5
band
Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in team sports, like football. While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are debates whether people should involve themselves in individual or group sports. Although doing sports alone benefits more on the comprehensive personal judgements, sports activity in team is giving more lessons in interpersonal relationship.
4.5
band
In many countries, young children are looked after by other people while parents go out to work. Is it a good thing or a bad thing?
Nowadays, It is true that young children are looked after by someone else when their parents are working. Although this trend can be a negative development because parents should take care their offspring by themselves, the main benefits are not only to parents who work full time but also to children themselves.

The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood

The plans below show a public Park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in team sports, like football. While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, young children are looked after by other people while parents go out to work. Is it a good thing or a bad thing?