The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows information about the
percentage
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of citizens purchasing and consuming tea and
coffee
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habits in five Australian cities.
Overall
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, almost all the cities showed a higher
percentage
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of going to a cafe for
coffee
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or tea compared to other habits.
Whereas
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,
residents
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in Adelaide had a closer
percentage
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in
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of
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having the habit of getting instant
coffee
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and going to a cafe.
This
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is followed by
residents
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who showed the habits of buying fresh
coffee
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which depicted the lowest
percentage
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among all cities. Melbourne had the highest
percentage
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of locals who drank
coffee
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or tea in a cafe at about 64% and Hobart was just 1% away from reaching the same
percentage
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.
This
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is followed by Sydney with 3% difference at 61%. Adelaide,
however
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, had a close
percentage
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of locals who bought instant
coffee
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at around 49% with locals who bought fresh
coffee
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at 50%. But
afterall
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after all
, Hobart had the most
residents
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who bought instant
coffee
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at around 54%.
In contrast
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, citizens from Brisbane and Adelaide
bought
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who bought
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fresh
coffee
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had a similar
percentage
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at about 34%.
This
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habit is followed by Hobart’s
residents
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with a rough
percentage
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of 37%.
However
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, the city which had the most
residents
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who picked up
this
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habit is Sydney,
reached
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which reached
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at
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apply
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44%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, coffee, residents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • buying and drinking habits
  • percentage
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
  • consumption trends
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • notable
  • speculate
  • features
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