The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
of citizens purchasing and consuming
tea
and
coffee
habits during the
last
4 weeks in five Australian cities.
Overall
,
it is clear that
having a
coffee
or
tea
in a cafe was the most common habit, except in
Adelaide
.
Additionally
, the
percentage
of residents purchasing instant
coffee
was always higher than that of those buying fresh
coffee
in all cities. Looking at Sydney and Melbourne,
while
the
percentage
of Sydney’s people drinking
tea
or
coffee
at a cafe was about 61%, the figure for Melbourne was slightly higher, at around 63%. Meanwhile, more than 45% of citizens in Sydney and Melbourne had a habit of purchasing instant
coffee
,
whereas
the amount of those buying fresh
coffee
in these two cities
were
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around 44% and 43% respectively.
In contrast
, consuming
coffee
or
tea
at a cafe accounted for the largest
percentage
of people in Hobart, followed by Brisbane and
Adelaide
, at approximately 56% and 49% respectively.
Similarly
, around 53% of people in Brisbane and Hobart preferred to buy instant
coffee
, compared to nearly 50% of those in
Adelaide
.
Finally
, a close similarity can be seen in the
percentage
of citizens buying fresh
coffee
in Brisbane and
Adelaide
, at around 34%,
whereas
Hobart’s figure was higher, at roughly 38%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, tea, coffee, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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