The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
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of citizens purchasing and consuming
tea
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and
coffee
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habits during the
last
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4 weeks in five Australian cities.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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having a
coffee
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or
tea
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in a cafe was the most common habit, except in
Adelaide
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.
Additionally
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, the
percentage
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of residents purchasing instant
coffee
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was always higher than that of those buying fresh
coffee
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in all cities. Looking at Sydney and Melbourne,
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the
percentage
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of Sydney’s people drinking
tea
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or
coffee
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at a cafe was about 61%, the figure for Melbourne was slightly higher, at around 63%. Meanwhile, more than 45% of citizens in Sydney and Melbourne had a habit of purchasing instant
coffee
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,
whereas
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the amount of those buying fresh
coffee
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in these two cities
were
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around 44% and 43% respectively.
In contrast
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, consuming
coffee
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or
tea
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at a cafe accounted for the largest
percentage
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of people in Hobart, followed by Brisbane and
Adelaide
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, at approximately 56% and 49% respectively.
Similarly
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, around 53% of people in Brisbane and Hobart preferred to buy instant
coffee
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, compared to nearly 50% of those in
Adelaide
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.
Finally
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, a close similarity can be seen in the
percentage
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of citizens buying fresh
coffee
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in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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, at around 34%,
whereas
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Hobart’s figure was higher, at roughly 38%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, tea, coffee, adelaide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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