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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates details about the
number
 of
car
owner
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owners
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 in
Britian
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Britain
 from 1971 to 2007.
Overall
, the
rates
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rate
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 of
people
 using one
car
 was the largest and the lowest percentage belongs to
number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
possess
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possessing
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 three or more cars over the years in the UK. In 1971, there was almost 50% of
people
 who have no
car
, which
was decrease
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decreased
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drammatically
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dramatically
 to just around 25% in 2007.
In contrast
, the
number
 of
people
 owning two cars quickly rose at the same time,
under
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from under
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 10% to approximately 26%. It can be clearly seen that the
number
 of
people
 owning one
car
 occupy the highest rate in the UK
1975
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in 1975
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, over 43%, which
then
 gradually changed to 42%, meanwhile, the
number
 of
Britian
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British
people
 owning three or more cars
increase
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increased
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 slowly
over
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apply
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the time from 1971 to 2007, about 2% to 7%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • stable
  • percentage
  • significant decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • growth rate
  • category
  • notable
  • analyze
  • ownership
  • comparative analysis
  • general trend
  • highlight
  • focus on
  • comparison
  • significant change
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