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The graph below shows theh number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows theh number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph above illustrates the count of holidaymakers travelling to an
island
 in the Caribbean
sea
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 between 2010 and 2017. Generally, there has been a rising trend
on
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in
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 the different statistics, particularly in the total number of tourists. Between 2010 and 2011, the
amount
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number
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 of visitors
spent
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who spent
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 their time staying on the
island
 itself remained stable at around 0.7
million
, with a remarkable increase after 2011 with a plateau
is
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reached between 2013 and 2015 at 1.5
million
, followed by a fluctuation between 2015 and 2017. In terms of the travellers
remained
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who remained
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 on cruise ships for
accomadation
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accommodation
, the trend fluctuated at the level of less than 0.5
million
 until 2013,
where
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when
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 the interest in cruise holiday
has
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started to
increased
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steadly
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steadily
,
overtooked
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overlooked
overtook
 the preference
of
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for
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 staying on the
island
 and peaked at 2017 with 2
million
 cruise travellers recorded. Accounting to the total statistics, one
million
travelers
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travellers
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 were recorded
visted
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visited
 the
island
 in 2010,
this
 is followed by a stark rise with the number more than doubled to 2.5
million
 in
year
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the year
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 2015. After the trend remained for one year, the
recorded
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record
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 rose significantly from 2016 and
reched
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reached
 its peak in 2017 at 3.5
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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