The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.
The diagram illustrates the view of the town of Garlsdon, and two suggested positions to construct a supermarket.
Overall
, there is a total population of 65000 in the city.
Moreover
, the greatest amount of people live in Cransdon and it is
also
evident that
this
town is industrialized. Looking at the S1 location is located at Northwest,
this
suggested location can be accessed by citizens of Hindon under 12 km.
Also
, it is close to the housing area at North.
Similarly
, both S1 and S2 are positioned next to a railway track.
However
, the S2 location is located towards the centre and residential areas within the city at both top and below where they can access more conveniently and easily.
Furthermore
, S2 is located in the town centre and it has no traffic, so it allows people access quickly
whereas
S1 is located towards the countryside and has no mention of a traffic zone. Interestingly, residents at both Bransdon and Cransdon will be able to visit the supermarket at greater rates if it was built at S2 so the sales will be higher as the population of 15000 and 29000 can visit respectively.
In addition
, there are two main roads close to S2.
In contrast
, S1 have a single.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • transportation infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • environmental impact
  • green space preservation
  • noise pollution
  • local wildlife
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • boost to local businesses
  • property values
  • competitive landscape
  • consumer choice
  • community feedback
  • stakeholders
  • support
  • opposition
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