The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.

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The diagram illustrates the view of the town of Garlsdon, and two suggested positions to construct a supermarket.

Overall

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, there is a total population of 65000 in the city.

Moreover

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, the greatest amount of people live in Cransdon and it is

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evident that

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town is industrialized. Looking at the S1 location is located at Northwest,

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suggested location can be accessed by citizens of Hindon under 12 km.

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, it is close to the housing area at North.

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, both S1 and S2 are positioned next to a railway track.

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, the S2 location is located towards the centre and residential areas within the city at both top and below where they can access more conveniently and easily.

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, S2 is located in the town centre and it has no traffic, so it allows people access quickly

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S1 is located towards the countryside and has no mention of a traffic zone. Interestingly, residents at both Bransdon and Cransdon will be able to visit the supermarket at greater rates if it was built at S2 so the sales will be higher as the population of 15000 and 29000 can visit respectively.

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, there are two main roads close to S2.

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, S1 have a single.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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transportation infrastructure
accessibility
environmental impact
green space preservation
noise pollution
local wildlife
economic benefits
job creation
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property values
competitive landscape
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The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

These days, school should focus more on producing young people who have the skills required to join the workforce, rather than focusing on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Some people believe that teenager should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?